Sunday, June 28, 2009

And so on... The Fall

Brownie Prichette was not sure how exactly she reached here. She couldn’t see a thing or move an inch. The thick silence around her was veiling some distant sounds of traffic, and her shoulders were throbbing. Her entire body felt tired.

The last memory she had was of being lost in the lanes of Colaba Causeway trying to evade the drug peddler whom she owed either some money or five fresh customers. Was she forced or did she fall by accident? She was trying hard to remember… anything... anything at all… oh! …Yes…she remembers that she had turned around one last time to check if she had managed to lose him yet, and there he was right at her heals, as if materialized from thin air, his crude bloodshot eyes staring coldly at her, with an almost inconspicuous glint. And before she could blink an eye, she had felt a sharp needle poke the outside of her left thigh. It hadn't hurt much.

Now, against her own wishes, she was finding this peace silently satisfying, except for the hunger pangs just about beginning in her tummy. Given that her life could be in danger, hunger should have been the last thing on her mind. She had, knowingly or unknowingly, reached a point that she always wanted to reach. A point from where her life would change and she could start looking up. Now, from where she was, things could only look up.

She was stuck right at the bottom of a 10 ft deep vertical pit.

15 comments:

rabbit said...

this was scary...
but a reality for some.

blunt edges said...

he he...4 some reason it made me smile...ok i knw it wasnt funny but still d line "Now, from where she was, things could only look up" made sense of a diff kind after d last line...lol

gud one buddy :D

Beauty and the BEast said...

:O thats a gripping narrative!! Shit!!

Its the beginning of the goosebumps ride!!

Pinku said...

very well written...and yes the pit comes sooner or later for all drug abusers.

d gypsy! said...

i'd an impression i was reading some 'SAW' series...

second reading made me see some light...

too many of SAW could be bad i guess...

Crimson Feet said...

@ blunty - lol.. yes.. thanks for getting subtle understated cheap weird humor of this post :)

@ beauty - :) :)... thanks but no.. i am not writing any novel on this like u might be visualising

@ pinku - thanks

@ gypsy - havnt seen SAW... am i missing out on too much?

Shanu said...

Wow..that was gripping!

You write v well!!

AD said...

oooooooooooooohhh
can i smile now ;)

Crimson Feet said...

@shanu -- thanks!! :)

@AD --- of course! i expected everyone to smile at least a little at the irony!

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